CHE Standards

Gertrude Said:

I need sources that explain in detail what happens to the nerve cells of someone with Lou Gehrig's disease?

We Answered:

I found the link below. I put the word "astrocyte" in after my initial search of "ALS neural changes." There were some other sites that came up too -- one was too hard to read just because of the way it was formatted. Anyway. Sounds like a big project. Good luck.

Wayne Said:

Will you read my 1 page medical marijuana position paper?

We Answered:

No.

Jessie Said:

I need a little help proof reading my 1 page paper on medicinal marijuana, could you please help?

We Answered:

Suggest you use more paragraphs.
Use a paragraph break whenever you change the topic.
Example:
"During 1920-33..." and more.
You'll see them.

Suggest you check for the places where you left out needed verbs.
Suggest you also check punctuation.
If needed, read the piece out loud to see where and how long you pause.

When making a list, use a colon instead of a semi-colon before the list.
Example:
"Conditions such as: AIDs (capitalize that), Lou Gehrig's..." etc.

Suggest you separate lists from statements because they're not a part of a list.

Suggest, except years mentioned for prohibition of alcohol, you spell out numbers.
Examples:
"New Jersey will be the fourteenth state..." and "...within the next six to twelve months" and "...seventy-five year..."

Suggest you check this for any unneeded repetition.

In the last paragraph the correct word to use is "...summary..." rather than "...sum..."

You'll see errors now.
You did a pretty good job.
I'm think these short suggestions will help you organize this better.

Sara Said:

I need a little help proof reading my 1 page paper on medicinal marijuana, could you please help?

We Answered:

A good essay. A few minor points I'd change:-

When the prohibition was overturned, the PRIMARY rationale

The primary reason it remains illegal, as an elected official you should always be concerned with the popular vote. In history, proponents of marijuana’s legalization/decriminalization automatically could kiss the popular vote goodbye, logic aside. REWRITE

In sum, REMOVE

Lastly, REMOVE

the government will find a way to profit via tax through its DEcriminalization.

I find it highly hypocritical creating a 75 year prohibition, in turn legalizing marijuana not for logic or compassion, rather economical benefit being the most compelling argument REWRITE

Marie Said:

I need a little help proof reading my 1 page paper on medicinal marijuana, could you please help?

We Answered:

"When the prohibition was overturned, the PRIMARY rationale behind this decision was that it was criminalizing innocent citizens affording a pleasure they were legally given in the past"
Primary in place of primarily.

"The primary reason it remains illegal, as an elected official you should always be concerned with the popular vote." ?? This makes no sense

"There is a huge problem with this, the above mentioned symptoms can be simulated or falsely created for the sheer purpose OF gaining legal access to the drug"
Of instead of For

"Conditions such as; Aids, Lou Gehrig’s disease, muscular dystrophy, and multiple sclerosis are nearly impossible to fake and testing can positively confirm the aforementioned conditions.
Suggestion to what you originally had put down

"There have been concrete multiple sclerosis studies showing the use of medicinal marijuana will slow the progression of the disease, these studies have been dismissed in the past"
Needs to be re-worded

"I do believe this is the tip of the iceberg in terms OF marijuana being legalized, a decision that California may be the first to make."

"Lastly, I find it highly troubling that regardless of its status, the government will find a way to profit via taxing or through its criminalization."

"I find it hypocritical legalizing marijuana not for logic or compassion, but for economical benefit as being the most compelling argument."