CHE Standards

Charlene Said:

what grade would you give me for this paper?

We Answered:

Your research paper starts with, which implies that it has a lot of, first person which is a no no.

Beth Israel Medical Center assists addicted patients and their families on the road to recovery from substance use - should say substance abuse. Substance use means any substance being used by anyone for example: a woman using cleaning supplies on her kitchen counter - so where you are using it to support your recovery wording it only confuses the audience.

Your first paragraph is written more as if it were intended for bullet format and not paragraph. You introduce too many ideas to have it in paragraph format. An abstract can be written in a bullet style but it should actually be in bullets. If your professor prefers paragraphs to bullets then it actually has to be paragraphs and not just bullets clumped together,

Group psychotherapy is more effective that one on one - should say "than" not that. Misusing such words tends to make me think that you didn't read your own paper. You just hit the spellcheck and thought that good enough for a final product. The term "one on one" doesn't belong in work written for such an audience as the one that you are addressing.

This is far too long for an abstract unless this is both the abstract and the beginning of your paper. Other than having the title abstract, I would not know that it were intended to be an abstract, It just looks like a regular paper.

Another study displays the satisfaction from clients who sought out substance abuse group - your second paragraph starts this way. "another" implies that you haven't finished your thought from the first paragraph so why have you started a second. I don't think that "displays" is the word you want to use here. It can generally be used interchangeably with the word you intended but this is not a generalized paper. Display means to make available for sterile viewing. You can't display customer satisfaction other than getting quotes from all of them and compiling a list and no "study" would find such information useful. A study "shows."

I've lost interest in reading further what you have to say because the first paragraph tells me that you don't know what an abstract is, you don't read your own work, and you don't know how to make a paragraph to begin with so what warrants your receiving face time from an audience interested in such a topic as phychotherapy.

I am sorry for what I've had to say thusfar but I really hope that you find it useful.